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The chart illustrates how many times humans in the USA used ready meals restaurants from 2003 to 2013. Overall, the percentage of
people
 who went to these restaurants once a week and once or twice a month was higher in these 3 years, in comparison, those who went every day or those who never ate there accounted for the lowest proportion. In detail, the proportion of
people
 who ate fast food once a week in 2003 and 2006 experienced just over 30% and 35% respectively,
then
 dropped to around 25% in 2013,
however
, the percentage of those ( once or twice a month) accounted 30% in 2003,
then
 that plunged to 25% in 2006, after that in 2013 there was a considerable increase over of 30%. The percentage of those
people
 who went ( several times a week) changed intermittently from around 15% and 20% between 2003 and 2013, while those
people
 who ate every day and never ate accounted for less than 5% in these 10 years.
By contrast
, those who were there a few times a year experienced over 10% in 2003,
then
 rose to 10% in the
last
 7 years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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