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Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly , in
this
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 present world
life
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 has become more convenient and comfortable due to the advancement of technology .
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 , a couple of
people
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 thinks that
life
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 without technology is easy-going while the involvement of the latest equipment in our
life
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 makes it hard . I disagree that simple way is the only solution and
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 essay will discuss how machinery had made our lives easier . In the early days , everybody lives their
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 without luxury because of the non-availability of facilities . To explain
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 ,
people
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 travelled miles and miles on foot owing to unavailability of means of transport , as well as
people
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 live without smartphones ,
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 , in case of emergency they were not able to contact their family members .
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 , ladies perform their regular household chores manually ,
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 as mopping the floors , blending spices and cooking food on coals . all the above illustrations clear that
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 at an early age was so difficult and
people
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 had to do more hard work as compared to the present generation .
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 , continuous science research had shadowed all the globe with its latest advancements and providing feasibility and ease in everyday
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, to elaborate, latest and fastest means of transport system make individuals
life
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 easy as one can travel without any hassle. Smartphones connect
people
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 in a glimpse and easiest mode to receive all the latest news around the world. Along with that, the latest electronic equipment makes lives heaven,
for example
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, vacuums, electric blenders, coffee machines, electric stoves and whatnot.
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, it makes the nation lazy and less physical activity is performed by every individual which raises several health concerns. To conclude , I agree that advanced automation makes everything so easy that you can do anything at your fingertips,
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 , a person should not depend on these gadgets entirely as
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 can cause severe health concerns in the long run for future generations. Everyone should balance their routine
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 and
also
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 perform some tasks manually to keep themselves more active.
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