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Schools should stop using books for teaching and instead use films, TV and computers. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#schools #books #films #tv #computers
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Books
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 should be replaced by
technologies
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 like
computers
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, TV, and films for teaching in schools. I disagree with
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 belief, it has been years that we
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books
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 to teach our
students
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 and I think these new
technologies
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 can be used
besides
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books
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 not totally replacing them.
First
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 and foremost,
books
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 can be touched. When you are reading a book you are able to touch every word on paper and not only you can
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 your eyes but
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 you can
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 your hands, despite
computers
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 that you can only watch everything and try to memorize them. It is said that the more you
use
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 your all senses during the study, the more you can memorize
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.
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, teachers can lose their data on a computer.
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 cannot be broken, or the info in them cannot be deleted,
books
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 are like a loyal friend which save everything for centuries, while
computers
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 should become updated from time to time and during these updates some of their hardware and software become old-fashioned and have to be uninstalled, because of that some of the
information
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 on them will be lost. Some may argue that new
technologies
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 can help
students
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 to search better. While all the contents of
books
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 can be found on the internet these days, there should be no force for using
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 in schools.
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, I think confronting
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 with the ocean of
information
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 on the internet will bring them nothing except confusion. In conclusion, I think
technologies
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 can be a good source of
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besides
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books
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 for
students
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, but they cannot be totally replaced with them, as we can learn and memorize studies better from
books
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 than
computers
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.
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