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Children should never be educated by parents at home. Do you agree?

#children #parents #home
The percentage of
children
 who are educated by
parents
 at home is increasing every year. In my
opinion
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 it can be bad for
children
 to stay at home alone only with their
parents
.
Firstly
,
parents
 are not qualified to educate their
children
. Most
parents
 are qualified in a completely different field and cannot help their
children
, but are more likely to confuse them.
Secondly
,
parents
 cannot combine work and lessons. They have many other tasks and responsibilities and find it difficult to combine everything with their
children
's education.
This
 can lead to incomplete education for the student. They get full time with their
parents
 but don’t have contact with classmates and teachers which means when they grow up, they can isolate themselves. All in all, in my
opinion
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 it is not good for them because
children
 need social contacts and
making
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make
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 new friends, not to be alone in their homes in front of a computer, without any kind of communication with their friends.
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