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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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In
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 modern era,
people
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 are confused about selecting the exact item, because Some
people
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 think, that today's society has numerous
choices
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. In
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 essay, I will explain to what extent I agree with
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 statement and I support my opinion with concrete examples of the above-stated opinion. On the one hand, in
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 era, individuals have many
choices
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 in multiple sectors
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 as education,
food
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 and work.
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, individual can make decisions instantly, because they have many options for achieving their goals. In comparison with ancient times, most young adults are confused about their future goals. But nowadays, youngsters easily make their own decisions in their education side.
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, In previous decades there were fewer
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 but now it totally changed, even a low-level student can able to get a degree
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 the many
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 that come into the industry.
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, society has too many
choices
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 in the
food
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 department as well. In comparison with previous decades, they have multiple
choices
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 in their foods. To illustrate they can have all types of foods
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 as Japanese, Chinese, Indian and Italian cuisine at a time.
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, when a person opens a hotel, based on another country's
food
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, it will instantly get famous, because
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's
choices
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 are increasing day by day.
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, Italy
food
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 cuisines are famous in America, because of the varieties they cook. In conclusion,
people
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 can make decisions instantly, because they believe that nowadays, they have too many
choices
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 in multiple categories,
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 as education, work and
food
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 sectors.
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement.
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task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides a clear opinion, but it lacks deeper analysis and discussion. Adding more specific and varied examples could enhance the task response.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is generally clear, but the essay would benefit from more coherent transitions between ideas to improve the flow and readability. For example, adding linking words like 'Firstly,' 'Additionally,' or 'Finally' could help.
task achievement
The writer clearly states their opinion and provides relevant examples to support their view. This enhances the task response.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, adding a clear structure to the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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