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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There’s no doubt that adolescence can be a difficult period both for youngsters and their
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 some people believe that
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 does more harm than good ,in my opinion,
dispute
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the dispute
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 is an integral part of a teenager’s personal growth . On the one hand, a part of society that believes that conflicts are harmful could claim that
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 might damage relationships in a family.
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 is because
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 disputes may lead to a lower level of trust in relationships between
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 and children.
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, for young
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 it is quite common to have issues with their performance at school. And the resulting confrontations with
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 about it сan create difficulties in communication afterwards.
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, if there are no conflicts, the environment in a family will be much more pleasant and peaceful.
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, I still consider
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 to be an essential part of a child's personal growth and development. Arguments with
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 can teach the youth how to
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 conduct negotiations and solve problems in similar situations when they are adults.
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, let us consider the case when a teenager wants to attend a football club , but his
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 do not let him do
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 . Obviously, he can remain silent and say nothing for the sake of
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 avoidance. But as a consequence, he will not know how to negotiate and find compromises when it comes to something significant for him in the future.
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, if a child is willing to get involved in the
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, the benefits of
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 a dispute will definitely outweigh the stress of confrontation with
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. To draw the conclusion, despite the risk of worsening relationships in a family, I strongly believe that dispute is a vital step for a teenager on the path to becoming a mature and independently-minded person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • individuality
  • emotional intelligence
  • conflict resolution skills
  • persistent
  • unresolved
  • communication gaps
  • rebellious behavior
  • substance abuse
  • mental health issues
  • critical skills
  • deeper understanding
  • family dynamics
  • quest for independence
  • crucial for adulthood
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