Prison is the best punishment for criminals. To what extant you agree or disagree ?
In today
soceity
crimes are everywhere, Correct your spelling
society
such
as murder, stealler
and drug-seller Correct your spelling
stealer
ect
. These Correct your spelling
etc
people
are dangers
and harmful in our communities. The government prevent Replace the word
dangerous
have
more folk to be a terrible crime. Wrong verb form
having
Therefore
, today nationals has
Change the verb form
have
setup
regulations, courts and jails to protect the residents and prevent more Correct your spelling
set up
crinimals
.
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criminals
First
example, Add an article
The first
drug
is the bigger issue in our living area now, some Add an article
the drug
people
are selling Add an article
the drug
drug
to get to Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
wealthy
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a wealthy
life
, others used drug
to Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
released
stress, and some others maybe try it for fun. Wrong verb form
release
Although
people
understand overused cocaine could make present mental
problem, Correct article usage
a mental
but
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apply
sometime
folks Replace the word
sometimes
never
aware of the Add a missing verb
are never
consenquences
, which if someone Correct your spelling
consequences
get
caught by selling or using cocaine or ais they could Change the verb form
gets
be send
to jail as a good punishment for them.
Change the verb form
be sent
Second
example, Change the article
The second
murderer
is very a Change the article
a murderer
danger
person in Replace the word
dangerous
this
word, obviously these people
must have mental
issue, Add an article
a mental
that is
why they can kill a person without fear. As a result
, the government has createdAdd an article
a
prison
for these terrible crimes for their Fix the agreement mistake
prisons
life
lesson,
and hoping one day they will Remove the comma
apply
changed
Change the verb form
change
be changed
they
attitude.
Years ago, in the countryside village, Correct pronoun usage
their
people
used to punished
crimes by their Wrong verb form
punish
Correct your spelling
own
owe
rules, Correct your spelling
own
such
as cutting they
fingers off, if they have been stolen something from other. Correct pronoun usage
their
However
, these activities was
Change the verb form
were
too
clue, so they decided to Replace the word
to
lockup
them to stoped them Correct your spelling
lock up
committing
heinous acts.
In conclusion, I strongly agree Change preposition
from committing
criminal
should be sent to jail to learn some Fix the agreement mistake
criminals
life
lessons, as a killer should lockup in prinson
for their whole Correct your spelling
prison
life
,
because they cannot pay back the dead person Remove the comma
apply
life
, but they must pay with their life times
to stay in a security building fo the rest of their Correct your spelling
lifetimes
life
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