In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?
The
first
problem is people
are too obsessed about
owning a Change preposition
with
house
which may lead to mental and physical health. Due to the fact that to buy or to build a house
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,house
it
requires a large amount of money,and the number often starts from 10,000 U.S. dollars to millions depending on how nice, style and the size of the Correct pronoun usage
apply
house
.
When a lot of money is essential; Add a missing verb
is.
therefore
, people
start working overtime and may have a second
or third
job to be able to reach their goal. Moreover
, some people
might do their work for long hours straight which may lead to physical health such
as office syndrome and depression. This
is because they do not have work life
balance.
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work-life
Secondly
, there are some advantages for
renting a Change preposition
to
house
. First
advantage is that Change the article
The first
people
can relocate as they want
easily because they did not own it. Correct your spelling
won't
Second
advantage is they do not have to worry about property value. Change the article
The second
For example
, when some house
owners want to change their house
location after years of living the value of buildings may decrease. In addition
, people
can live in expensive cities while spending less money than owning it, due to the extremely expensive cost of houses.
In conclusion, some people
may have office syndrome and be stressed after hours of work they have done in a day. Additionally
, they can change their house
location easily with no worry about property value. I believe that owning a house
for someone who cannot afford it, will lead to depression, anxiety, and other physical health problems, it is more important for people
to have work-life
balance.Correct article usage
a work-life
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