In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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problem is

people

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are too obsessed

about

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with

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owning a

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which may lead to mental and physical health. Due to the fact that to buy or to build a

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house

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,house

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requires a large amount of money,and the number often starts from 10,000 U.S. dollars to millions depending on how nice, style and the size of the

house

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When a lot of money is essential;

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people

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start working overtime and may have a

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third

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job to be able to reach their goal.

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, some

people

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might do their work for long hours straight which may lead to physical health

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as office syndrome and depression.

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is because they do not have

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balance.

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, there are some advantages

for

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renting a

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advantage is that

people

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can relocate as they

want

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easily because they did not own it.

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advantage is they do not have to worry about property value.

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, when some

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owners want to change their

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location after years of living the value of buildings may decrease.

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people

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can live in expensive cities while spending less money than owning it, due to the extremely expensive cost of houses. In conclusion, some

people

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may have office syndrome and be stressed after hours of work they have done in a day.

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, they can change their

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location easily with no worry about property value. I believe that owning a

house

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for someone who cannot afford it, will lead to depression, anxiety, and other physical health problems, it is more important for

people

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to have

work-life

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a work-life

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balance.

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Dec 14, 2021

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

270 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
living space

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