In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

The
first
problem is
people
are too obsessed
about
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owning a
house
which may lead to mental and physical health. Due to the fact that to buy or to build a
house
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it
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requires a large amount of money,and the number often starts from 10,000 U.S. dollars to millions depending on how nice, style and the size of the
house
.
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When a lot of money is essential;
therefore
,
people
start working overtime and may have a
second
or
third
job to be able to reach their goal.
Moreover
, some
people
might do their work for long hours straight which may lead to physical health
such
as office syndrome and depression.
This
is because they do not have
work life
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balance.
Secondly
, there are some advantages
for
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renting a
house
.
First
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advantage is that
people
can relocate as they
want
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easily because they did not own it.
Second
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advantage is they do not have to worry about property value.
For example
, when some
house
owners want to change their
house
location after years of living the value of buildings may decrease.
In addition
,
people
can live in expensive cities while spending less money than owning it, due to the extremely expensive cost of houses. In conclusion, some
people
may have office syndrome and be stressed after hours of work they have done in a day.
Additionally
, they can change their
house
location easily with no worry about property value. I believe that owning a
house
for someone who cannot afford it, will lead to depression, anxiety, and other physical health problems, it is more important for
people
to have
work-life
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balance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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