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You recently bought a piece of sports equipment from an online store. When you first used the piece of sports equipment, you found a problem with it. Write a letter to the manager of the online store. In your letter. Describe the problem with the piece of sports equipment Say what happened because of the problem Explain what you would like the company to do.

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Dear Sir, My name is Janvi Bhuva. I used to do sports equipment shopping on your Decathlon online website. I am writing
this
 to express
my
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the
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 problems which I have faced for the
last
 5 days. A week ago, I bought
the
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a
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 cricket kit for my upcoming tournament. In kit includes batting pads, batsman gloves, cricket ball and bat,
helmet
, stumps, and other accessories. The cricket kit was amazing
as well
as
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and
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 the quality of the equipment was extraordinary when I
opened
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opened it
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, but when I started to play the
helmet
 was irritating on my head.
Furthermore
, other accessories quality were well-maintained by your company.
According to
 my preference is think that the
helmet
 size was smaller than my head size. Because of
this
, I
cannot
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 concentrate on my game and sometimes I felt
headache
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a headache
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. I request to company manager to exchange
this
helmet
 and provide
appropriate
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the appropriate
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 size of
helmet
.
Also
, I applied for
return
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 and exchange request on your website. It is an emergency because my next tournament will
come
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be
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 in 10 days. So that, company have to exchange as soon as possible. In anticipation, await
for
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your positive response. Yours faithfully, Janvi Bhuva
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You might want to include a specific example of how the helmet affects your performance during practice or past games for further clarification.
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Adding a brief thank you towards the end might make the tone even friendlier.
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The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for a formal complaint letter.
coherence cohesion
The closing 'Yours faithfully' is correctly used since you addressed the letter to 'Dear Sir.'

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anticipation
  • defect
  • malfunction
  • inconvenience
  • disappointment
  • remedy
  • replacement
  • refund
  • resolution
  • patronage
  • loyalty
  • customer service
  • timely
  • efficient
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