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Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility for sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#sugar #people #governments #responsibility #control #individuals #intake
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Over consuming
sugar
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 has been one of the problems that many countries face in the current world situation because its own nutrition has disadvantages that outweigh advantages.
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 makes many
people
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 have concerned about the authorities should play an essential role to control it, while others believe that it should be ourselves to respond to
sugar
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consumption
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. The following paragraph will be discussing both opinions.
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, the conclusion has been reached. On the one hand, those who believe that each individual should respond to their own
sugar
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intake
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 might have an idea that we know ourselves better than others, especially in the case of
consumption
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.
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,
people
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 who have diabetes that very sensitive to sweetness, they cannot rely on others about their
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intake
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, they need to take
care
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 of themselves.
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, these groups
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 believe that we should respond to our actions because we should
care
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 about what things we will consume and not be too reckless to consume anything that might not good for our health.
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, the other group who believe that the governments should take a response to control
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intake
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 might have an idea that at least the governments should address their
people
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 to concern about their
sugar
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consumption
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.
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, the governments should make their
people
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 to aware of the disadvantages of
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intake
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, or make some short information about what will happen if we do not
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 about
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consumption
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, and the
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 thing that the government should do is increase the
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 tax to prevent
people
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 addicted to
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. In conclusion, the former and latter paragraphs are the perspectives of both groups. Personally, I believe that the government should take some responsibilities while
people
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 should take
care
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 of themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-consuming
  • unhealthy
  • government responsibility
  • control
  • sugar intake
  • taxes on sugary products
  • regulations
  • advertising
  • public health campaigns
  • associated risks
  • personal responsibility
  • self-discipline
  • dietary habits
  • advocating
  • nutrition information
  • empowers
  • informed choices
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