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Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The importance of planting
trees
 in the world because
trees
very
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 helpful to create fresh
air
. So some people deem that
trees
 must be planted in open space of town by people compared
than
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 building more home. I accord entirely with the nations and
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate
about
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plantation
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 of
trees
 in
cities
. Commencing with the most prominent reason why
trees
 are
pivotal
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 part of
like
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life
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 as well as it must be planted in place of
cities
 because it helps to decrease the
temperature
 of surrounding areas. By
this
, we have seen the
temperature
 rates in towns generally is high.
As a result
, we should
planted
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trees
 where some areas of
cities
 because it reduces the
temperature
 of
environment
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the environment
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.
For example
, in India, there are many
cities
 as well as
government
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the government
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 faced
temperature
 problem of
cities
 so
government
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the government
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 would take
mission
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the mission
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 of plantation in
such
cities
 like
delhi
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. Another worth considering
reason
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 of my agreement is affixed with the improved
air
qulity
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quality
 index, which
is not only matter
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does not only matter
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 for human life but
also
 it is effective on animals as well as food cycle. By
this
,
trees
helps
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improved
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air
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the air
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 quality index
through
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by
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 producing O2 in
air
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the air
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.
Therefore
, mankind
have
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 seen that in
such
 places where
trees
 are more there
air
qulits
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quality
quilts
 index is below the 100, it is
good
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the good
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 number among
this
 pollution. To conclude,
eventhough
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even though
housing
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the housing
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is need
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need
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 of
human
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humans
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, I think we can not
imagination
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 without
trees
 a better environment of the world and better health
of
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 humans.
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