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Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages.

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In light of international-inclined education, it is important to know a
second
language
. For
this
 reason, parents and
schools
 believe that teaching
children
 that
study
 in primary
schools
 a foreign
language
 is better than saving it for secondary
school
 teaching modules. While there are some disadvantages of
this
 idea, I do believe that its benefits
outweighs
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 the drawbacks. The main
disadvantages
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 of
this
 curriculum
is
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 that
schools
 and parents might put pressure
to
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 their
children
. Adding foreign
language
 classes would make the teaching plan heavier, which results in stressful classes. An example of
this
 is evident in Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam
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 when many
student
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 aged 6 to 11 are forced to attend
to
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extra classes after
schools
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, which
said
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 to be voluntarily but it is not,
consequently
, the common feelings of these young students is exhausting and frustrating when studying English.
Moreover
, the previously mentioned idea might deprive kids
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 their outdoor activities. Many
children
 in Hanoi are made to stay at home and
study
 English,
instead
 of joining friends in the neighbourhood,
as a result
, studying
foreign
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language
 put
a
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mental pressure on young
learners
.
However
,
this
 can be reduced by adjusting
school's
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 curriculum in order to fit student's
timetable
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, both developing their
second
language
 and maintaining their playtime.
Nevertheless
, studying
new
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language
 in primary
school
, which is at a very young age, brings many positive outcomes. The main
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benefit
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 is students who follow
this
 curriculum show
a
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better progress than that
in
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older
learners
. Studies show that
children
 can learn
new
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language
 better than adults since they are more
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 new subjects and
also
 have more time to spend learning the
language
.
In addition
, introducing new languages into primary
school
 will equip young
learners
suffice
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 knowledge
on
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 the
language
, which helps them to be competent to
study
 at international
schools
 at a young age. Many
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highschool
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 students cannot
study
 abroad because of their
limitation
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limitations
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 on foreign
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 is an example of
this
. Not only making it more efficient in terms of learning
new
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language
, but studying
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 in primary
school
also
 offering
student
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students
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 chances to
study
 from international lectures that
tought
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taught
thought
 in other languages at a very young age. In conclusion,
although
 learning a
second
language
 might be stressful for
children
 in primary
schools
, I do believe the fact that
this
 is a great opportunity to equip
learners
 with a foreign
language
 for their future directions outweighs the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Pronunciation
  • Fluency
  • Brain plasticity
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Proficiency
  • Educational opportunities
  • Motivation
  • Resource constraints
  • Specialized teachers
  • Academic pressure
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum balance
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