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Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

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Most
nations
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 globally are united together in the fight for humanity even if they are different culturally. Some people are of the opinion that enhancing trade and cultural relations is seen as a positive move whereas others believe that
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 move will annihilate the country's
identity
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both points and argue that bringing
nations
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 together should be seen as a win because of these reasons: world peace, financial help and military aid when needed.
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, the enhancement of business and personal relationships have long been seen between
nations
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 as a great way of developing brotherhood/sisterhood.
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, Canada and USA despite their differences are known to be allies.
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 helped form a bond
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 mutually beneficial for trade, financial help and military aid as well. Canadian soldiers were widely known to have helped the USA when they were at war.
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, the more the allies, the lesser the need for war.
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, clothing designers are widely known to look at different countries and their styles when lacking in ideas. There is
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 a major difference in the ideologies of different
nations
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 politically. For these reasons, many believe that
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 is leading to the lost
identity
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 of the nation in question. The more united we are, there more the loss of
identity
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 in
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 case according to these citizens.
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, I believe that bringing
nations
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 together in terms of business and culture will have great advantages economically and for developing personal relationships. The loss of
identity
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 is a minimal disadvantage considering most people will appreciate the differences anyway.
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