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Given is a bar chart illustrating how people access news in 2013, 2015 and 2017. In summary, most people watched news through
television
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in all three years.
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, the
percentage
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of three
medias
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media
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decreased, while one of
it
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increased. In 2013,
television
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had the highest
percentage
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with 80%, after 2 years, it slightly dropped to 68%. The
second
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highest media is
newspapers
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, it was around a half of
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television’s
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television
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.
Radio
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and
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internet
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the internet
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had a similar
percentage
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at around 32% in 2013, while both
newspapers
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and
radio
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had downward trends from 2013 to 2015.
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,
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internet
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was the only category that rose from 32% to 40%. From 2015 to 2017,
television
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mildly ascended to 70%, while
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internet
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the internet
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increased by 30% to 70%.
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,
newspapers
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reduced to 20% and
radio
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remained with no change. In 2017,
television
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was still the media with the highest
percentage
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,
where
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internet
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the internet
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was the only media that increase in
percentage
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.
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,
less
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people prefer accessing news through
newspapers
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and
radio
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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