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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teacher. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#parents #teacher #support
Nowadays, owing to our globalized world the most important thing to be a good person is the education for
children
. While that some
people
 think that educating at the school is the best way
to
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 kids, others believe that
parents
 could be the best tutor. I completely agree with the
second
statements
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 because both
parents
 have
possibility
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the possibility
a possibility
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 to teach other
skills
.
Firstly
, the way that
people
 educating to
children
 is important to
skills
 development and
parents
 could teach the capacity to
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 specific problems in different
situation
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situations
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such
 as
know how
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 could feel the kids in their process to learn.
For instance
, fathers know when their sons feel frustrated which would help overcome any adversity. For
this
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these
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reasons
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,
children
 could develop more confidence and
encourage
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 to learn quickly. Another point to consider is building moral values which will probably result in
children
 developing empathy
each
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 other and they
be
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are
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 able to help
people
 which is necessary to have a better world.
In other words
,
parents
 who are teaching
to
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children
 will have sons and daughters with emotional
skills
 that should help to learn to be
confidence
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people
, it will ensure that
children
 grow up to incorporate new values.
Furthermore
, some research indicated that kids that grow up with emotional
intelligent
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intelligence
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 have the capacity to learn better than
children
 that have
not
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develop
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this
 emotional area. In conclusion,
having
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 good
people
 with
emotional
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emotionally
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intelligent
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intelligence
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, moral values and
skills
 like empathy, we could have a better world
which
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in which
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parents
 are most the important teacher for
children
 because they know exactly how their sons and daughters are.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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