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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teacher. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#parents #teacher #support
Nowadays, owing to our globalized world the most important thing to be a good person is the education for
children
. While that some
people
 think that educating at the school is the best way
to
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 kids, others believe that
parents
 could be the best tutor. I completely agree with the
second
statements
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 because both
parents
 have
possibility
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the possibility
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 to teach other
skills
.
Firstly
, the way that
people
 educating to
children
 is important to
skills
 development and
parents
 could teach the capacity to
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 specific problems in different
situation
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situations
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such
 as
know how
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 could feel the kids in their process to learn.
For instance
, fathers know when their sons feel frustrated which would help overcome any adversity. For
this
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these
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reasons
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,
children
 could develop more confidence and
encourage
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 to learn quickly. Another point to consider is building moral values which will probably result in
children
 developing empathy
each
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 other and they
be
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are
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 able to help
people
 which is necessary to have a better world.
In other words
,
parents
 who are teaching
to
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children
 will have sons and daughters with emotional
skills
 that should help to learn to be
confidence
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people
, it will ensure that
children
 grow up to incorporate new values.
Furthermore
, some research indicated that kids that grow up with emotional
intelligent
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 have the capacity to learn better than
children
 that have
not
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develop
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this
 emotional area. In conclusion,
having
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 good
people
 with
emotional
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emotionally
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intelligent
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intelligence
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, moral values and
skills
 like empathy, we could have a better world
which
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in which
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parents
 are most the important teacher for
children
 because they know exactly how their sons and daughters are.
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