Some people believe that children leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Some people think that pupils should spend their leisure
time
doing educational
activities
, or else they will completely waste their
time
. I totally disagree with
this
view because I believe that
children
may have their own decision on how they utilize their
time
to do
another
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another non- educational activity
other non- educational activities
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non- educational
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non-educational
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activities
.
On the contrary
, it can be counterproductive to force a child to
study
all day, even in his free
time
.
Firstly
, learning is a lifelong process. So, the
time
one spends learning will never be limited. For that reason,
children
should not be forced to
study
when they have
time
to relax.
Thus
, It is a fatal mistake to regard
children
's non-educational
activities
in their free
time
as a waste of
time
. Not every child has enough energy to
study
constantly. And, having to
study
too much may cause depression, tiredness and pressure for a child.
For instance
, in China, some
children
have psychological problems and issues with health due to the fact that the only thing they do is
studying
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study
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.
Secondly
, just learning, even during leisure
time
will definitely make it impossible for
children
to have good physical health because they do not get any
exercises
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exercise
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. Participating in physical activity plays a huge role (in what?), and it is
also
an important factor for
children
to be interested in learning as they have more energy and have
time
to release their stress and pressure.
In addition
, studying too much can deprive
children
of the opportunity to learn essential life skills. In conclusion, I oppose the idea that
children
’s leisure
activities
must be educational as
this
idea may bring numerous disadvantages.
Also
, I would recommend parents control
children
's free
time
by limiting their
time
using the phone and encouraging them to take some outdoor
activities
.
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