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In some countries, there are not enough medical and educational facilities in rural areas. Some people believe newly graduated teachers and doctors should be sent to rural areas to work for some time, while others suggest that people should be free to choose a place to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion."

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Due to the lack of specialised hospitals and educational institutions in the rural
areas
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, it is suggested by some
individuals
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 that newly fresh out graduates should be sent to these
areas
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 for a few years. Others disagree with
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 notion and say that choice of
work
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 should be left on these
individuals
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.
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 essay intends to discuss both views as well my opinion in the subsequent paragraph. I,
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, side with the former view. There are many pros of working in rural
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.
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, rural
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 are having
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lack these facilities, the arrival of well-trained doctors and teachers in the countryside would provide better education and health care services.
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 would significantly enhance the living standard of these
individuals
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.
Secondly
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,
this
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 policy is
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 likely to prevent rural inhabitants from moving into big cities in search of schools and medical services.
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, overpopulation can be avoided in large urban
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.
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, since there is a lack of workforce in rustic
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. So, it will be a great opportunity for new teachers and doctors to translate their theoretical knowledge into practice which can build their confidence level to deal with people.
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, some people say that new graduates are able to decide where they want to
work
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.
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 with, everyone has a right to choose the workplace that they feel comfortable with. Most
individuals
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 like to live and
work
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 in a place which is very close to their family.
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,
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 type of enforcement violates their rights and they will be unable to
work
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 in a proper concentration.
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, if the government force these graduates to
work
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 in rural
areas
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then
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 these occupations become less attractive.
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, fewer students would choose
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 type of profession. In my opinion, the government can provide better remuneration to these
individuals
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 by providing higher wages or other incentives to stay in a backward area. It develops not only rural
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 but
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 boosts the economic level of urban
areas
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. To sum up, it would be an ideal step by sending the best doctors and teachers into rural
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 by the government. But the authority should offer financial and non-financial schemes to these
individuals
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 to show their willingness to go to
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areas
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 and
work
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 with full energy.
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