A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • suggest an interesting part of the city to live in • describe the public transport in your city • say how your friend can meet new people there

Dear Kamal, I hope you are doing well. I feel delighted to hear that you are shifting to my city, Ludhiana. In
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letter, l am giving some suggestions to you regarding my city. In Ludhiana, there are a number of new locations with all basic amenities which are needed to survive in a new place. Rishi Nagar is one of them because it is not only near to supermarket but
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easy to go complex mall, hospital, transport and many more.
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, public transport is the main mode of commuting from one place to another. Mostly folks prefer to use buses and autos for going to school, universities and workplaces. Despite
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, people like to go to different kinds of parties,
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as club parties, kitty parties, which help to meet new individuals, and you can get a chance to make a good friend circle in
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city. Look forward to hearing from you Best Wishes. Arpan

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Make sure to include all points the prompt asks for. Your suggestions were good but could be a bit more detailed.
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Try to connect your ideas more clearly. Use simple connectors like 'also', 'firstly', 'next'.
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Check your grammar and spelling to make sure everything is clear and correct.
task achievement
You provided a good suggestion for a place to live.
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Your closing statement is friendly and polite.
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