Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Children
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's growth is affected by a couple of influences around them. Whereas some people thought that the development of
children
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has many general elements
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as social media, digital media and music, in my opinion,
children
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are influenced by their blood relationship much more than other factors. These days, teenagers spend a lot of hours watching TV or youtube, with their friends as well as listing to music,
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their thinking way will be affected by those in the television thinking. The main reason is that the child's brain is likely to suffer from anything he sees,
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influence might be positive or negative since he is wide open and can't differentiate between the balanced attitude and the bad one.
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, if he listens to helpful music or has a relationship with polite friends his attitude will remain very good. All the same, if he watches violent or sharp movies or videos he will be aggressive in the near future, but unless he follows a science program that's will increase his knowledge.
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, even if the teenagers spend most of their time not with their family, but blood-relationship still the main factor which affects their development.
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follow their parents and do like them so parents pay attention to what they are doing because their sons and daughters act like them.
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, Cristiano Ronald, -a professional football player- we can see that his son becoming a football player like his father and his father inspiring him. Parents must monitor their
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Ipad and their use of the internet because they easily go behind what they watch or what their peers do. Family is the most important element of teenage character.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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