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Living in a country where people have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems

#country #people #language
living in a society where you have to speak a different
language
 can create serious social
issues
, as well as, special
issues
, in my point of view, I agree with
this
 sentence, in
this
 essay, I will give some explanation and provide two examples.
language
 is the main communication for humans, if you are living in a place where you have to speak a different
language
, that can create different kinds of
issues
,
such
 as misunderstood, bullying, or discrimination. one of my friends who volunteer for a local church in the USA, he has to work on Asian teenagers that face bullying issue in school, the core reason for bullying according to him is the
language
 barrier, because of misunderstanding that triggers bullying happened.
second
, different
language
 means different cultures and lifestyle, these can create special
issues
 as well.
for instance
, I experienced twice discrimination in Ireland, both were because of
language
, like I could not able to take the order through a phone call, and
then
 the customer started to say something bad. to sum up, living in a society where you have to speak different languages can let you explore a different place and experience a nice and special lifestyle,
however
,
that is
also
 accompanied by some bad experiences.
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