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Living in a country where people have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems

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living in a society where you have to speak a different
language
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 can create serious social
issues
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, as well as, special
issues
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, in my point of view, I agree with
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 sentence, in
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 essay, I will give some explanation and provide two examples.
language
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 is the main communication for humans, if you are living in a place where you have to speak a different
language
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, that can create different kinds of
issues
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,
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 as misunderstood, bullying, or discrimination. one of my friends who volunteer for a local church in the USA, he has to work on Asian teenagers that face bullying issue in school, the core reason for bullying according to him is the
language
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 barrier, because of misunderstanding that triggers bullying happened.
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, different
language
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 means different cultures and lifestyle, these can create special
issues
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 as well.
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, I experienced twice discrimination in Ireland, both were because of
language
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, like I could not able to take the order through a phone call, and
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 the customer started to say something bad. to sum up, living in a society where you have to speak different languages can let you explore a different place and experience a nice and special lifestyle,
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,
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also
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 accompanied by some bad experiences.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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