A friend is considering buying a house nearby, but you have decided to leave the area due to a rise in crime. Write a letter to your friend advising them not to move into the neighbourhood. In your letter: – Recommend that your friend not go ahead with the purchase – Give the reasons behind your decision to leave – Suggest possible alternative areas that you know

Dear Jashan, I hope you are doing great. I am glad to hear that you are buying a new house in my area. To my dismay, I am writing
this
letter to warn you about ongoing crimes nearby, and I advise you not
sign
Fix the infinitive
to sign
show examples
any deal for a house in my society as the violation and unlawful activities are giving up day by day. To add more grief, I have decided to leave
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society because
this
environment is not suitable for my family.
Moreover
, Street snatching and robberies have increased, and no one can walk freely here.
Lastly
,
this
area is half of drug dealers.
Thus
, there is no point to live here. As my house retailer said there are plenty of alternative areas to live. He sent me
couple
Change the article
a couple
show examples
of societies and among
them
Add a comma
them,
show examples
decent William Street is the one I found safe and cheap.
Apartments
Fix the agreement mistake
Apartment
show examples
showings are beginning next week so please join me, it will be a great investment. I look forward to
hear
Change the verb form
hearing
show examples
from you. Best regards, Raj
Submitted by rajwants.1997 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and clarity, try to structure your letter with clearer paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point, such as recommending against the purchase, explaining why, and suggesting alternatives. This will help make your letter easier to follow.
task achievement
Polish the language a bit more to enhance the overall tone of your letter. For example, phrases like 'To add more grief' could be rephrased to be smoother, such as 'Furthermore, I have decided to leave because...'.
task achievement
Your tone is very appropriate for writing to a friend, combining concern with friendliness.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well done and fitting for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS

Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reconsider
  • unfortunate
  • incidents
  • safety concerns
  • deteriorating
  • neighborhood
  • increase in crime
  • personal experience
  • unsafe environment
  • alternatives
  • lower crime rates
  • amenities
  • community-oriented
  • recommend
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!