The only reason people work hard is to earn more money. There are no other reasons to do it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, in the materialistic society where we live people tend to
work
as hard as they can only to outstanding a superficial life Use synonyms
buying
goods. Some people believe that their main and only reason to Change preposition
by buying
work
is to earn money. As far as I am concerned, individuals have other motivations to gain in their professional Use synonyms
life
rather than money. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
This
essay will discuss the reasons why I extremely believe people have other reasons to go for Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
besides
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financially
gain.
Change the word
financial
Firstly
, workers worldwide will have higher Linking Words
up
aspirations rather than remuneration, Change preposition
apply
such
as esteem and self-actualization. Once someone goes to university, the desire of achievement in Linking Words
finding
a good job, Wrong verb form
find
being
promoted and Wrong verb form
be
having
their Wrong verb form
have
hard-
Correct your spelling
hard work
work
rewarded is Use synonyms
also
part of any person’s aspiration. Linking Words
Maslow
Hierarchy of Needs illustrates that employment represented by financial security comes as “Safety needs”, Change noun form
Maslow's
while
psychological and self-fulfilment needs will be Linking Words
the
top Change preposition
at the
in
the pyramid representing all the prestige, feeling of accomplishment and achieving full potential. Change preposition
of
Therefore
, human beings have a vast range of necessities rather than the safety-needs.
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In addition
, despite the psychological approach, another factor can be Linking Words
also
spiritual. Spiritual needs are defined as needs and expectations which humans have to find meaning, purpose, and value in their Linking Words
life
, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
such
needs can be Linking Words
also
applied in their workplace. One remarkable example is Mother Theresa, who remains known in history as someone who is selfless, Linking Words
as a result
of committing her time and effort towards helping the less fortunate. Linking Words
Thus
, Linking Words
this
makes it impossible to justify the fact that people’s only reason for hard Linking Words
work
is no other than financial.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, from the arguments presented above, it is inconceivable to believe that financial remuneration is Linking Words
that
Correct word choice
what
driven
them to Wrong verb form
drives
work
. Use synonyms
Although
monetary aspiration is a vital factor worker would consider their career aspirations, Linking Words
spiritual
beliefs and will Correct word choice
and spiritual
also
be a reason for them to pursue a job.Linking Words
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