Nowadays, there are many reasons environmental pollution. What are causes and solution?

Have you ever thought about how the
environment
became messed up? The
environment
is ruined because there are
people
who
don’t
have a conscience. I think it happens because half of the
people
don’t
really know how serious it is. So today, I am going to explain about 3 pollutions.
First
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pollution
is
Air
Pollution
.
Air
pollution
is caused by Factories and Deforestation.
Also
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the smoke in tobacco gives a small impact on
Air
pollution
. There are lots of factories beside cities.
Also
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,Also
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some of them have fires coming out. We can see lots of black smoke going up into the
air
and connecting with clouds. Deforestation can be a problem. Trees absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen
to
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air
, but if there are
less
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trees
then
that means the carbon dioxide is surrounding us.
Second
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pollution
is
Water
Pollution
.
Water
pollution
is caused by plastics which are thrown away by
people
.
This
has caused a serious problem. Lots of
fishes
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fish
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die because they eat plastics or get trapped inside
plastic
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the plastic
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.
Also
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we need to eat so that we could live. And
eventually
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,eventually
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we can see that we are
also
eating
plastic
, still throwing away plastics. The
Last
pollution
is
Land
Pollution
. As the cause of
Water
pollution
, the cause of
Land
pollution
is
same
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.
People
throws
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away their trashes and litter on
ground
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the ground
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.
Also
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you might have
saw
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sawed
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some
people
spitting, especially
on
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in
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traffic. The bad thing about
plastic
is that it doesn’t
disappears
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for years. Other
trashes
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trash
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like banana peel or tissues,
they
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can be absorbed
in
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in-ground
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ground
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but not
plastic
. Most
people
say that the
environment
is ruined because of
people
but they still
don’t
change their actions. All they do for the
environment
is just make
this
little campaign. I
don’t
know if they are doing it properly, the trash is getting more and more and
also
the global warming gets more serious. The basic things that help
people
live are
water
,
air
and
land
.
People
know that
water
,
air
and
land
are limited. But they act like they think it's not limited. I recently learned that Korea doesn’t have much
water
.
People
always use and buy new things rather than recycling and reusing the things that were once used.
This
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was the three pollutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • ecological balance
  • air quality
  • waste management
  • biodegradable
  • environmental regulations
  • fossil fuels
  • ozone layer
  • climate change
  • biodiversity
  • industrial emissions
  • contaminants
  • ecosystem
  • public transportation
  • deforestation
  • recycling programs
  • eco-friendly products
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