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In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society ?

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Some
parents
 believe that their
children
 should spend more
time
 on their homework rather than break. In my strong belief, having less leisure
time
 has definitely bad effects on students' mental and physical health as well as social development.
This
 essay will analyse how working hard on assignments influences pupils and society. On one hand, without a doubt , spending enough
time
 studying is obligatory for each student and all
parents
 must take some strict measures to encourage their
children
 to do their assignments.
For example
, if
children
 consider
time
 less than three hours for studying, they will surely fail in their exams and they will not become successful people for their families and society.
On the other hand
,
,
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unfortunately
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 some
parents
 force their
children
 to study hard for more than 7 hours.It should be mentioned that it is disastrous and make big problems for them. In fact, they need to have some
time
 for doing hobbies like stamp collecting and playing computer games or doing sports like football and hockey as well as spending specific times talking with their
parents
, siblings and close friends.
Moreover
, they must have extra
time
 to participate in national festivals, social clubs and things like that in order to promote their personality level. By the way of conclusion,
this
 essay stated the view of some
parents
 about the amount of studying that there is not a balance between free
time
 and study
time
.
However
, I believe that there must be a balance between work and life in order to be a beneficial person for your society.
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