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the working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. do you agree or disagree

#week #workers #weekend
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There is a suggestion for reducing the working
days
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 in the week and
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 making the weekend longer, so
workers
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 can benefit from it. I believe
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 a good step in the right direction and I agree with it, so in
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 essay, I will explain my viewpoint.
Workers
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 and machines can
work
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 and do tasks;
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,
workers
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 are humans and they have feelings and need to rest after
work
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. It is not good to make
workers
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work
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 every day of the week because
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 will affect negatively their
work
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 and they will be tired.
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, it is important for a worker to have
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 off and not to
work
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 so they can enjoy their weekend. It was proven that the productivity of
workers
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 increases when they have to
work
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 less time in their jobs.
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 means that when
workers
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 have two off
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 of one,
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, they will feel that they can produce more
work
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 and do tasks efficiently in their employment. If the employment stakeholders of the public and private sectors decide to take a step to force companies and organizations to make the working
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 shorter, I think
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 will reflect positively on the quality of the
workers
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’ jobs and increase their productivity, so employers will see the results clearly. In conclusion, from my point of view, I agree that the working week should be shorter, and
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,
workers
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 should have a longer weekend, so they can do their
work
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 better and improve their productivity which causes good results.
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Provide more specific examples or case studies to support your arguments. For instance, mention a country or a company that has implemented this system and its outcomes.
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Try to elaborate and provide more detailed reasoning in your main body paragraphs, as this will strengthen your arguments.
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Work on ensuring that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using linking words and phrases effectively can help achieve this.
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You presented a clear viewpoint and stayed focused on the topic throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
You provided a structured essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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