Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently, electronic devices swept every house gaining attraction and interest in both adults and children. In fact, many people believe that daily use of computers has more negative than positive effects on children. In my opinion, I strongly agree that

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using a computer for kids has good impacts but unfortunately has much more negative ones on their social life and health. Primary, those who spend a lot of time on their gadgets will obviously be far from society and incorporated in their games. In recent times, they are building their virtual world

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actually full of loneliness which resulted in a lack of social activities and friendships.

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, they are losing many enjoyable moments and the chance to build a significant relationship with others.

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, most of them prefer to stay at home playing video games rather than meeting their friends and enjoying football.

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, many modern studies confirmed that kids are suffering from a variety of health problems due to their excessive utilization of electronic devices. Indeed, a big percentage of them are sustaining overweight cases at young ages due to lack of body movement.

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, researches showed that concentrating on computers for a long time each day will affect negatively the intellectual abilities, concentration and thinking of a child. In conclusion, from my point of view, I see that child’s daily excessive manipulation of

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new device will harm his/her both life and body.

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, it is the responsibility of parents to recognize

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serious situation and take accurate and tough restrains in order to control their children’s activities and overcome the issue.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Children usually want to play the same games and watch the same tv programs as their friends. Should Parents allow it or not? Give your opinion and examples from your experience.

Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it is not endless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

While many advocate for the necessity of obtaining a higher education, others argue that it is not essential for success in today’s diverse job market. Discuss both views regarding the necessity of higher education and give your opinion.

The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assignments over the school year. What do you think of this trend?