Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance?

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People
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today regards
balance
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between
work
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and life as one of the most important issues in
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. The main problem for most
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is that
work
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takes up too much
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and causes mental health issues and the best way to achieve
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balance
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is to
work
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more efficiently. The primary issues associated with
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-life
balance
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are that many
people
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overworked
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in the
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decades and it easily has caused lots of mental
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. Since the
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IMF financial crisis in 1997, most
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people
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had difficulties in working and some lost their jobs
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, which made the job market enormously competitive.
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means that the number of unemployed
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increased and job openings have disappeared, so job seekers today usually fail. Even if they find
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, overtime increases and it
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with not enough private
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.
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, it is hard to deny that
people
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live together with chronic fatigue, sleeping
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, self-esteem
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, and so on.
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why there has been a sharp rise in cases
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people
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who
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are looking for psychiatrists. The best way to achieve a better
balance
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is making efforts to
work
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efficiently as much as possible and secure enough personal
time
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. The current working environment will not change simply, so working
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efficiently is a more pragmatic solution for individuals.
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,
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like tablets and smartphones allow
people
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to get a lot of
work
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done in what
were
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previously wasted hours in the past. You can send business
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, online meetings, and even
work
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out of home by using them which reduces
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to commute and choose the proper outfits,
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the reason why I believe it's better to mix non-face-to-face and face-to-face tasks today. In conclusion,
people
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usually have mental
problems
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with working long hours, so eagerly pursue the well balanced
work
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-life
time
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. There will be more
people
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who want to
work
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efficiently, and
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, they will be able to enjoy some private
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. By doing so, you can enjoy a human life,
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as having an interesting hobby with your
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person.
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