Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow any exercise routine. Why do you think it is happening? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

Older

people

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are recommended by doctors to have a regular

exercise

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plan, but most of them do not have any routine. There are a number of causative factors contributing to

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new phenomenon.

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,certain measures can be taken to encourage

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generation. there are two main reasons why older

people

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do not consider

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to be their daily routine.

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with, many of these elderly may forget to

exercise

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regularly. To put it differently, they are bound to fail to remember their daily affairs which

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from some diseases

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or just being lazy. A lucid example of

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people

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who have operated on their knees or spinal cord and they need to work out at least twice a day in order to heal sooner but unfortunately, they tend to forget to work out after their surgery.

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, older

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are mostly alone and isolated and

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may lead them to not being in the mood of walking or doing regular

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. In my view, these

people

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can be encouraged by some measures in their

life

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. As for encouragement,

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can be reminded by their children or even the media or advertising industry daily. Simply put,

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can produce specific

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programs just for

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section of society. A good illustration of

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is special workout channels on TV to obviate the needs of the elderly. Younger

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furthermore

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, can hold

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plans and activities for seniors to inspire them to gather around and

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in a group. Take group activities in parks as a salient example; Instructors can hold classes in fresh air for the older generation which does not only inspire them but

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ameliorate their health level.

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seniors

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encouragement seems to have a burden on

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shoulders. In spite of all contributing factors, proper plans can reduce the severity of

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issue considerably.

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