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Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that space programs should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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After finding the evidence of water from the mars
people
 have become more curious about the
space
 and universe. Even,
people
 think that
space
 programs should continue to explore more about the universe but on the other side, few
people
 suggest that the budget of
space
 exploration is too high
instead
 of it the same budget can be used for different projects. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, while strongly opine with the advantages. Some demerits which
people
 argue, that exploring
space
 is not only expensive but
also
 at the same
time
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 it is risky. Astronauts might lose in
space
, get crash while landing, might get into accidents with meteors.
For instance
, in 2002 NASA's spaceship named Apollo 2 mission was to land Astronauts from the
space
 centre outside the earth, But something happened with the spaceship when they were in the atmosphere of the earth. And Spacecraft crashed on the atmosphere itself, and because of that 8 astronauts died.
In addition
, the
space
 shuttle cost around 500 million dollars which were pretty high at that time. In the end,
this
 point makes the
people
 put their point strong on the disbelief of the
space
 programs. On the other side, few
people
 still support
space
 programs by explaining the recent success of
space
 exploration which help to understand more about the solar system. One of the recent examples was India's
space
 organization named ISRO who launched the satellite called Chandrayaan. The mission of Chandryaan was to find the water particles on the moon with the help of laser scan EOS 2341 technology.
Eventually
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 they got succeded to find the water particles on the moon.
Also
, they found out the old river passage, from which it was concluded that there might be a river in the moon. In the conclusion,
Space
 exploration is needed for the betterment of mankind. Not only it will help us to find new possibilities to settle on other planets
such
 as Mars or Neptune but, it will
also
 help us to understand the creation of the earth.
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