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Your child's school is going for a trip out of the country for 3 days and parent is allowed to join the group. Write a letter to school. In your letter, you should: •ask questions about the trip •tell them why you want to join the group •explain how you can help.

Dear Sir, I hope
your
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you
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 are doing well. The purpose of writing
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 letter is to express my interest in going
to
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on
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Canada
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a Canada
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trip
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 with my daughter and her classmates.
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, I would like to know what kind of accommodations and transportation will be provided for the group,
duration
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the duration
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 of the
trip
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, and
itinerary
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the itinerary
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 of the
trip
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. The activities planned during the
trip
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 and their educational value.
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, I have been to Canada more than a few times recently.
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, I had an opportunity to explore its rich culture, food and weather.
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 that, most of Dhruvi's peers know me very well and I think they will
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 enjoy my company.
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, as I am certified in CPR I can immediately provide first aid, if required. Beyond
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, in the past, I have led many tourist groups who have visited our city, so I have experience in guiding tourists, which could be a great asset for you. Please let me know if you would like to get any additional information. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Adam.

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task achievement
Consider providing more details about your experience in Canada and how it relates to the trip.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure all questions are distinct and clearly formatted to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain consistent formality throughout your letter. For instance, use 'I hope you are doing well' instead of 'your are doing well.'
positive
The letter has a polite and respectful tone, which is appropriate for the context.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodations
  • itinerary
  • educational value
  • support
  • experience
  • logistics
  • enhance
  • comfortable
  • inquire
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