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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#countries #environment #level
Many countries face major environmental issues nowadays. There is
only
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way
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one way
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 to protect our
environment
 internationally. I
partiality
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partially
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 agree with the given statement which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, all the countries should have their own rules and regulations to protect their place and
environment
. Each country has
different
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a different
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 geographical
area
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areas
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 and industries in which
people
 deal with waste materials on daily basis. Government should provide proper facilities to deal with the wastage and strict laws for those who don't follow
it
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them
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 responsibly.
That is
 how
people
 can take care of the
environment
 by giving their
littel
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little
efforts
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.
At
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 the other hand,
people
 become more addicted to
the
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modern technologies
such
 as Air conditioning, Transportation facilities, computers and gadgets, etc. Which effects on climate change, global warming, pollutions, etc.
Furthermore
,
People
 become less hygienic in their daily routine. Throwing garbage in public places, rivers, parks, seas etc can be more dangerous for
environment
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the environment
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. In my belief,
people
 should be aware of the
environment
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environmental
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 rules and acts but can be more responsible and hygienic in their daily living life which can protect their home, place and the
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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