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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
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 is becoming
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the day
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 to day life. Few
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universities
 started to
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the
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online
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 so that
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 can learn online. My take on
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 is that online
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 will be less effective
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 attending the
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 in universities.
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, due to online
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courses
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course
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 there will be less interaction between professors and
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. Due to which there will be declination in
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asking the questions, solving doubts and learning in the group.
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, it happened
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 semester with us, because of COVID virus spreading in the whole city, our college decided to start the lectures online. When the online
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 started, the professor
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 always tried to explain the lectures within an hour but it extend due to any
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 and so
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the professor
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 skips the doubt sessions with the
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 explains that how
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internet
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 education is completing the
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half learning.
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, another problem
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 arises with online education is the lack of
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infastructure
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infrastructure
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 speed should be consistent and good to do the online
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. But most of the
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 still doesn't have
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proper
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because
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 it becomes very hard or
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 to impossible for them to do the online
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, In the countries like India,
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 shows that 30% of student has been unable to attend
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online
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 due to
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a lack
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 of
internet
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 access or devices.
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 problem coming with
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online
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availability
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the avability
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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. In the conclusion, online
classes
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 might give
advantage
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an advantage
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 to the universities to save
thier
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their
 expenses but on
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the other
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other
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 side from the student
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 it would be a challenging and mostly a disaster for the people
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who
dont
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don't
 have the
internet
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 or don't
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understand
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under stand
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understand
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 the
courses
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 properly. While offline
classes
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 will help
sudents
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students
 to ask more questions with that they don't have to face some big issues
such
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 as lack of
internet
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 access.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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