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Nowadays many people may have to work longer time and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons ? what employers do to life easier?

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Working
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 at the workspaces has now become popular in
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 contemporary era.
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, it is believed that many individuals may have to
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 extra time to
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 the expectations of employers, resulting in an unhealthy life. Notwithstanding,
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 discourse delves into the rationale behind
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 worrying
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, and
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, will put forward the panacea to arresting the worrying
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. From one perspective, the exponents of the school of thought that posit that staying late at the company to complete targeted
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 -have their justification. The motivation could be that most of the organizations believe in goal-oriented
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 as they have to meet the deadline of the project. Put differently, to gain monetary profit in
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 rival world, they pressured their staff to
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 beyond their working schedule because of tremendous working pressure and stringent timelines of the projects, resulting in adverse mental health effects to their employees. To epitomize, people who
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 in companies
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 as TCS and SUN pharmaceuticals have to
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 under pressure along with
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 just to complete firms’ targets.
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, those are adversely affected by mental illnesses
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 as hypertension, stress, and severe headache.
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, could there be any sovereign remedy to arresting
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 dreary prospect? Certainly, yes. Refreshment activities
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 as playing games and exercise would act as a great stress buster if it would be arranged by an employer at their workplaces.
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, employers may provide different types of perks
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 of
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 to their workers as
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 approach may keep their staff motivated to do
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 type of
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. To exemplify, leading manufacturing companies introduced an incentive program by appreciating their workforces for accompanying the owners to achieve their financial goals by doing
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 beyond their
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 timing. In conclusion, having explored both standpoints, as advanced, even though working
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 is a worrying
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 as it would lead to detrimental effects on staffs’ mental health, employers could contribute to
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trend
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 by adopting innovative approaches
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 as perks and refreshments at the workplaces.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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