some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research,business and the academic world.others believe that some information is too important or too valuable tobe shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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it is thought by some

people

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that to

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information

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in scientific research ,

business

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and the academic world as much as possible is beneficial .Others consider some

information

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too worthy or too important and somehow too valuable to

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freely.In my opinion,

information

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better

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shared but in a limited manner. On the one hand,it is better when

people

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have various knowledge or

information

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about different things.

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,there is a disease surrounding the world right now and if

people

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be aware of how to prevent or how to help the condition

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, it would be much easier to control or recovery the current situation.Another point to consider is that

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with more knowledge spreading away we can see more improvement in the society and a modern world would be created.

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,sharing

business

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or academic data can be useful in terms of having successful

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teacher

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or professional

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person.

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people

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should actually

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a lot of time if they want to achieve some

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whether it is scientific or anything else now since the knowledge needs to spend time,energy and

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it is

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unfair thing to do to just let everyone access easily.

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minor

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information

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which

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useful can be shared to help

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humanity.

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, it is

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the researcher's

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choice whether they want to

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or not. In conclusion, even though it may be a positive aspect for the

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and educational institution, free sharing the data should let the researchers decide that if they want to

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or not.

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think that some

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is beneficial whereas, some others are not useful and the others are too valuable to be shared.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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