some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research,business and the academic world.others believe that some information is too important or too valuable tobe shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
it is thought by some
people
that to
share
information
in scientific research ,
business
and the academic world as much as possible is beneficial .Others consider some
information
too worthy or too important and somehow too valuable to
share
freely.In my opinion,
information
better
be
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shared but in a limited manner. On the one hand,it is better when
people
have various knowledge or
information
about different things.
For instance
,there is a disease surrounding the world right now and if
people
be aware of how to prevent or how to help the condition
then
, it would be much easier to control or recovery the current situation.Another point to consider is that
,
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with more knowledge spreading away we can see more improvement in the society and a modern world would be created.
Moreover
,sharing
business
or academic data can be useful in terms of having successful
student
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students
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,
teacher
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teachers
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or professional
business
person.
On the other hand
,
people
should actually
spent
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a lot of time if they want to achieve some
information
whether it is scientific or anything else now since the knowledge needs to spend time,energy and
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hard-work
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it is
kinda
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unfair thing to do to just let everyone access easily.
However
,some
of
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minor
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information
which
are
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useful can be shared to help
the
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humanity.
Nonetheless
, it is
researcher's
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choice whether they want to
share
or not. In conclusion, even though it may be a positive aspect for the
business
and educational institution, free sharing the data should let the researchers decide that if they want to
share
or not.
In addition
,
i
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think that some
information
is beneficial whereas, some others are not useful and the others are too valuable to be shared.
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