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Nowadays, people around the world are facing the COVID-19 pandemic toughly, so we should change our lifestyle to prevent ourselves from coronavirus.
Therefore
, many academies in our globe started to let their
students
 study online
instead
 of sitting with each other in classrooms. While the online
classes
 and onsite
classes
 a similar in their curriculums, they differ in their participation and attention. The similarity between studying at home and studying at
schools
 is that
teachers
 will not change the curriculums of the program while teaching online, so they do not have to worry that
teachers
 will teach them with uncovered syllabuses compared with onsite
classes
.
For instance
, when they study online, they have to learn five units per semester and when they have to stay at home, they still have to learn five units, too.
On the contrary
, one of the notable differences between learning online and learning onsite is that studying online will make them have fewer conversations with their
teachers
, whereas when they go to
schools
, they can ask or interact with their
teachers
 freely. It is due to the fact that they have to turn off their microphones while joining
classes
 because, if they open microphones all the time, the noise from their places may disturb their classmates. Another remarkable difference is that
students
 may pay less attention, especially, in the case that academies let them turn off their cameras.
This
 is because
schools
' boards
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 about their
students
' privacy. Meanwhile,
this
 can be a sweet chance for kids to do the things that may affect their study
such
 as sleeping in class and playing mobile games in class. To summarize, because of the COVID-19 crisis, many
schools
 in every country decrease the risks of being COVID-19 patients in their
students
. Fortunately,
teachers
 will teach the same course while they are having online
classes
.
However
, children tend to lack
of
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attention and interaction between them and their
teachers
 while having online learning.
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