It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

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day and age, it is believed that the significance of robots is growing.

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, their use will be felt even more strongly in the future, as they have already begun to replace basic human activities. As revolutionary as

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all sounds, many believe it may be more of a bad progress, rather than a good one. It is predicted that in the near future artificial intelligence might replace many of people’s ordinary activities.

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, basic duties and jobs will be done by a more elaborated version of the devices the society now possesses.

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, in my house, we have a robot vacuum cleaner called “Steve”, which cleans only the floors and the surfaces he manages to get in.

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, with how fast everything progresses, there is no doubt that in less than ten

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time there will be robots that clean the whole house, not only the floors. When it comes to the question

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these changes are for the best or for the worst, it is hard to give an accurate answer. In spite of that, humans tend to believe that

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development might easily take a negative turn.

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is because in the next few

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many jobs will disappear. A good example can be the doctors who diagnose patients based on scanners or radiograms, whose duties risk

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no longer needed. The reason for

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is that scientists are currently working on a new system which immediately can diagnose a patient based on all the information there is on the internet. So, not even the smartest doctors will not be able to beat it.

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might lead to a serious economic crisis.

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, it can be certainly stated that robots will be used increasingly more in daily activities, which

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structure

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which helps guide the reader. To improve even further, consider making your position on whether the development of robots is positive or negative more explicit in the introduction and conclusion.

structure

The logical structure of your arguments can be improved. For example, each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main point you will discuss. This will make your essay easier to follow.

examples

While you have provided examples, try to use more specific and varied examples to support your arguments. For instance, mentioning robots in sectors like healthcare or logistics in more detail can make your points stronger.

task

Your essay addresses the topic well and answers both parts of the question by discussing how robots could be used and whether this development will be positive or negative.

language

You have a good command of English and use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures effectively. This makes your essay interesting to read.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

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