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Most of the world's problems are caused by overpoplulation. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the
last
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 two decades, the
world
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 has experienced a dramatic surge in
population
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 especially in urban areas which have resulted in some drawbacks and benefits. I do not completely agree with the notion that the majority of the problems in the
world
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 today are due to overpopulation and
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 essay will explain in detail. Migration particularly from a rural area is becoming increasingly popular as
people
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 search for better opportunities to improve their lives which have led to overpopulation.The predominant problem with
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 trend is that it leads to shortages,a major challenge the
world
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 faces today. As the
population
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 is growing , it is becoming really difficult to meet the various needs of the
people
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. Take housing ,
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, the number of persons in need of a roof over their head's is greater than the houses available
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, more homeless
people
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 on the streets or overcrowded accommodations.
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, there is
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 a shortage of food because while farmers all around the globe are working tirelessly to meet the demand of
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 ever-growing
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, the effort seems to go unnoticed due to the fact that the demand is higher than the supply.
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, there are
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 some good aspects to overpopulation
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 as an increase in the workforce. A rise in the number of individuals inevitably means that there are more
people
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 available for work purposes. China is recognised as one of the highest overpopulated nations of the
world
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 today and regarded as the earth's village in that the majority of goods used in different places are all manufactured in China. If we take a look at household items ,
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, they are all made in China, from plates to dishwashers.
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 would not be possible if they had a very small
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. In summary, I believe that the significant increase in the global community has had both positive and negative effects on our lives
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 as an increase in the workforce on one side and extreme shortages of housing on the other.
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 growth has the tendency to continue so a balance needs to be established in order to manage the situation.

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