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The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
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These tables depict the computation of
beer
 and
fruit
juice
 per person every year in various nations. It is clear from the tables that the consumption of
beer
 is more than
fruit
juice
 in every country.
According to
 what is shown, the
countries
 that consume over 100L of
beer
 are three nations on the top of the table. Ireland consumes 155
liters
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, in the
second-order
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 is Germany which is 36L less than Ireland, and
then
, Australia with 106L. The
next
 people, Belgium, Denmark, and the United Kingdom, ranging between 100
liters
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 and 9
liters
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, and
they
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have the same numbers approximately (between 98L and 97L), occupying the positions on the table from 4th to 6th respectively
while
 other
countries
 below than 90L are between the positions of 7th and 4th, which include the US, Netherland, and Finland.
On the other hand
,
fruit
juice
 was consumed the most in Canada at 52.6
liters
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, followed by the US
with
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 42.8
liters
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. New Zealand consumed the least amount of
fruit
juice
 at around 24.8
liters
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.
To sum up
, we could say that
beer
 is most consumed by European
countries
while
fruit
juice
 is most consumed by North American
countries
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beer, fruit, juice, countries, l, liters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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