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Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #parents #children #importance #schools
Nowadays a garbage recycling become crucial for everyone in order to protect our mother earth. At the same time, there are many
countries
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 a lot of money on projects which are related
with
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to
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 recycling technologies. Most
children
 learn life associated lessons from their
parents
in
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at
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their
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an
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 early
ages
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age
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.
Therefore
, our education system strongly supports
benefits
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the benefits
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 of modern recycling technologies from small grade to university students.
First
, I remember that 50 years ago,
majority
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the majority
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 of families total income was just around 50 U.S dollars in many
countries
.
However
,
last
couples
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 of years, the average family income is becoming more than 2000 U.S dollars in developed nations so that these families creating more garbage’s
comparing
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 with previous decades. The middle European and North American
countries
 leading recycling technology in the world according to the UN report. I admit that they already spent
million
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 and million
euros
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of euros
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for
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on
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development
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the development
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 of modern recycling technologies.
Furthermore
, these
countries
 improved their textbook and described the importance of recycling.
Secondly
,
majority
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the majority
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 of the people remind each other advantages of recycling and push each other to follow up recycling rules.
In addition
,
a
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apply
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private
companies
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company
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 launched some social responsibility programs in order to change people's wrong habits of recycling.
For example
, the GP battery producer launched their marketing activity just like asking people that "Please drop your used battery here" in many shops.
Such
 social responsibilities
changing
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change
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 human incorrect habits so that
entire
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the entire
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 society is learning from each other
in
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apply
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every day about right recycling. In my opinion, it depends on society because recycling is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of both
parents
 and
children
, the most cases
children
 are able to learn from their
parents
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that both
parents
 and schools should teach
children
 about
best
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the best
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 recycling methods.
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