Some environmentalists list have advocated building wildlife sanctuaries to protect endangered endangered species. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage of doing this.

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Wildlife
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plays an important role in maintaining
healthy
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the healthy
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eco system
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. There are numerous ways to protect
wildlife
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in our world. With the increase in population and their nature
exploitation
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it is
mandetory
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mandatory
to
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a sanctuary for extinct
species
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. The
ecologists
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concernment towards
wildlife
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Sanctuaries to
safe
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endangered
species
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. In
this
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essay
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through
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and negative aspects of the given statement. On one hand, building Sanctuary had a great impact on protecting endangered
species
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.
This
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is the only way to save
wildlife
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.
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, it helps in maintaining
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ecosystem as it is part of
environmental
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life cycle.
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,
construction
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of
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bird Sanctuary saved around 2000
species
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in India.
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, the varieties of
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a bird
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bird
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birds
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raised
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up to twice in six
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months
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moths
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.
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is due to just
by
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taking a small step towards saving our beautiful
habitate
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habitat
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, building
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Sanctuaries is not an easy task. It depends on so many factors mainly high financial support.
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, it requires
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area to create
a
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wildlife
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and the environment, not like
zoo
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a zoo
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putting animals in small
space
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like
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a jail
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jail
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.
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, manpower is required and food needs to be provided. To conclude I would like to say that certain measures must have to be taken by
government
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to protect our
wildlife
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as it is
integral
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part of
human
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the human
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life cycle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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