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Many people these days have computers, laptops, telephones at their homes for work. Do you think the advantages of working from home are more than disadvantages?

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Electronic devices have become common objects that almost everyone has in order to
work
 from
home
, especially during pandemics. I believe that its upsides overshadow its outside since working from
home
 can help many employees in various ways,
such
 as reducing money in travelling and having a
work
-life balance. Burnout and depression can occur with
people
 who do their
work
 from their own homes. Because they had been working in the office with fixed timetable and
then
 they need to schedule the working hours by themselves.
This
 could be a hard
time
 for some workers to adapt to new shift hours,
for example
, some employed
people
 always go to
work
 at 7am but after working from
home
 they could wake up and
work
 anytime. If they could not adjust to it, they might experience a mental illness.
However
, most the employees would
also
 receive many benefits from
this
 type of
work
, it would reduce the cost of commuting and would help them improve their
work
-life balance. Because of advanced devices, more
people
 could choose to
work
 at their
home
instead
 of in the office,
this
 means that they do not have to commute to their workplaces anymore.
Moreover
, they are capable of selecting their own working shift hours, due to
this
, they could balance their pleasure
time
 and their shifting
time
 equally. In conclusion, even though there are
also
 some negative effects that happened with telecommuters, its positive effects are much better, because
people
 do not have to pay for travelling and they could
work
 and rest at any
time
 of the day.
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