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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The concept of vegetarianism is spreading in every part of the
world
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. Many
people
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 are opting to become vegetarians nowadays mainly to improve their health and
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 to maintain a balance in the ecosystem. I totally agree with
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 statement as one must eat good and stop animal killing.
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, eating green leafy food and pulses is healthy as they are easy to digest. Our digestive system takes almost two to three weeks to digest a plate of
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 or fish when compared to vegetarian foods which
takes
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 only hours to fully digest
it
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.
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 would automatically improve one's health thereby leading towards good lifestyle changes. Common problems
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 as diabetes, thyroid and blood pressure will be controlled and
people
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 would enjoy a better life as
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 would
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 make their immune system healthy. A recent study suggested that ninety
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 of
people
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 who consume non-vegetarian food suffer from high blood pressure cases.
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, having vegetarian food would help to achieve a balance in
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society.
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 means that nobody would eat
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 there will be no animal killing as we are unaware of the unknown substances that might be present in the
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.
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, a group of
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 in Wuhan consumed
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 which gave rise to
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 that spread around the
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 like a wildfire. Because of
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,
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the pandemic
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 began and the whole
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 came to a
stand still
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standstill
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 hampering the balance. Travelling was banned and
people
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 locked themselves up in their homes. To conclude,
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in
 my opinion everyone should opt to become vegetarian as
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 would help them live a healthy life.
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,
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world
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 would become a better place to live in if there will be harmony between humans and nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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