More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree (or) disagree?

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obesity

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cost can resolve

this

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expensive

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weight

gain. And WHO gives

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report that the in the future majority of the

people

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obesity

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to overcome form

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kind of

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that

people

are having. Now we will discuss

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the quality and range of the foods in the

obesity

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. The

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cost and vegetables and

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low cost.

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people

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vegetables and

fruits

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items

automatically they will lead

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the

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good and healthy

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it is adjacent,

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body are selling at very cheap rates and easily available everywhere and it is easy to carry

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junk

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only. At the same time

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, dry

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and vegetables which are healthy had

became

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expensive and

usually

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people

are avoiding it to having them. By increasing the price of

food

items

that leads to overweight is not only the major reason. We need to take care of our diet and should give preference to

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daily exercise.

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hand

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government should implement some instructions on the

food

industries which prepares junk

food

and should encourage

people

to lead

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healthy life. To conclude

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food

items

that give rise to

obesity

should be expensive and healthy

food

items

should

get

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at cheap rates. And it is an individual responsibility to have the controlled

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their consumption and should follow a good diet with

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consistency.

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