More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree (or) disagree?

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people
facing
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problem
of
weight
gaining. Few
people
believe
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that food item
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food
items
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obesity
, if sell them at
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cost can resolve
this
issue. I firmly believe that
,
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by
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selling
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junk
food
expensive
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can solve
this
problem
to some extent. Today,
number
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of
pupil
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pupils

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strugling
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with
the
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weight
gain. And WHO gives
an
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a

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report that the in the future majority of the
people
will have the
obesity
. They introduced many programmes related to
weight
gaining
problem
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problems

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to overcome form
this
. The
first
and foremost reason for
overweight
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being overweight

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is
that
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kind of
food
that
people
are having. Now we will discuss
about
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the quality and range of the foods in the
obesity
problem
. The
food
items
that
causes
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cause

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the
weight
gain should sell at
high
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cost and vegetables and
fruits
at
the
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low cost.
Then
people
usually prefer to have
the
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vegetables and
fruits
. If they consume healthy
items
automatically they will lead
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the
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good and healthy
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lifestyle

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life style
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lifestyle

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. But, in
real
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reality

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it is adjacent,
such
that the foods that can increase
weight
and fat in
human
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the human

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body are selling at very cheap rates and easily available everywhere and it is easy to carry
also
. So, most
of
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the
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people
prefer
the
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junk
food
only. At the same time
fruits
, dry
fruits
and vegetables which are healthy had
became
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become

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expensive and
usually
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people
are avoiding it to having them. By increasing the price of
food
items
that leads to overweight is not only the major reason. We need to take care of our diet and should give preference to
the
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daily exercise.
On the other
hand
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government should implement some instructions on the
food
industries which prepares junk
food
and should encourage
people
to lead
the
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healthy life. To conclude
that
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,
food
items
that give rise to
obesity
should be expensive and healthy
food
items
should
get
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at cheap rates. And it is an individual responsibility to have the controlled
on
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their consumption and should follow a good diet with
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consistency.
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