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Ahat are the reasons of increasing pollution and how can be solved it ?

#ahat #pollution
Rising
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in
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pollution
 level has become
great
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a great
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 concern for every country.There are different
reasns
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reasons
 responsible for
this
 issue,
however
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 it can be tackled with the assistance of government and people.
To begin
 with, excessive usage of private vehicles is mainly
onus
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 for
such
 circumstances.
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example
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 people prefer to drive private automobiles even for short distances and these vehicles release
determental
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detrimental
 gasses like carbon dioxide which pollute the environment in form of air.
In addition
 to
this
, because of
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the industry
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industry
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industrial
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 revolution ,
pollution
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the pollution
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 rate is growing up.In major cities,a number of factories are established to manufacture district products.industries emit toxic gasses and
also
 contaminate
water
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the water
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 of rivers. Despite having some serious causes of
pollution
.The authority can implement certain viable legislation. Country officials should organize seniors
on
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 public places where individuals can get knowledge and awareness while attending these camps.
Moreover
,
use
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 of
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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bicycle
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 is helping to reduce
this
 concern.Local citizens must ride bicycles for covering short distances and
also
adop
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adopt
 car-pooling.
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 ,in New Zealand, 40%
pollution
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of pollution
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 rare decreased due to
this
 scheme. To conclude ,
although
environment
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environmental
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pollution
 is enhancing due to different reasons,it can be addressed with the help of the government as well as
public
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the public
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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