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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree

#research #governments #companies
It is debatable whether
research
 should be carried out by
governments
 or private companies as it holds a major role in the advancement of over life. I absolutely agree with the fact that
governments
 should come forward to play their role in every nation.In
this
 ,
the
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essay I am going to defend why do I agree with the given statement.
To begin
 with, many
governments
 have reserved
of
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the
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huge amounts of money in their respective budget to run a country that has actually been collected in terms of taxes.
Therefore
, it should be the prime
prime
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responsibility of governing bodies to invest
massive
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 of money in the sector of
research
 in order to benefit mankind.Germany has realised that the
emissio
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emission
emissions
 of carbon dioxide as industrial waste is a serious threat to our environment,
therefore
, its government has decided in 2000 to develop a device which can absorb excessive co2 from air to convert it into a hard mass that can be stored underneath eath for a long period of time
thus
, the rapid rise in global warming can be halted and
this
 billion-dollar project was supported by the government of Germany which would not have been possible
otherwise
. Being a regulatory body in any country,
governments
 have the authority to implement policies and any finding came up after any
research
 which may be quite difficult in the case of the private sector.
Hence
, its dual role not only saves invested money in the
research
,
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 but
also
 benefits the public
as a result
.
For instance
, during the covid 19 pandemic, Uk funded based project found that a mask can 99.9% protect the transmission of
this
 virus and afterwards it was implemented in the rest of the world. Due to flexibility in funding government bodies can even bear expensive
research
,
Therefore
 it has always been only possible to get results from those studies which can't be reached to a point of success due to lack of funds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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