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Most of the students want to study abroad these days.So the advantage outweigh disadvantages?

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education is important for everyone. Majorities of the learners wish to research overseas nowadays. The advantages of studying abroad outweigh the
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disadvantages On the
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 hand, education out of countries is good for students future.
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, they introduce quality teaching, modern labs, better techniques and great environments. The way of transferring knowledge is the latest as compared to homeschooling.
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, the positive point of studying in foreign is that lives in a new place where they become familiar with new cultures as well as present-day traditions. While, in-
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, the negatives of studying abroad are expensive likely for living, shopping and food. In
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 person settle in his home or they purchase rents in his local currency While, in abroad they pay in dollars or pounds etc.
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, the researcher faces unique
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 in homey along with different
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 in which they face difficulties. In conclusion, big numbers of learners studying abroad have both advantages along
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disadvantages. Getting better educations
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 with familiar with new cultures and traditions from other sides of regions could benefit but it has its own drawback with facing different languages including financial issues.
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