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the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

#tourists #caribbean #island
The line graph depicts how many visitors travelled to
Caribbean
Island
 from 2010 to 2017. In general, the total
number
 of
tourists
 visiting
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
 increased significantly over the course of 7 years starting from 2010.
Additionally
, the statistics figured out that during the period visitors staying on
cruise
ships
 are lower than those who
choosing
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choose
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 to stay on the
island
. In the beginning year of the period, the total quantity of
tourists
 travelling to the
Caribbean
island
 stood at exactly 1
million
, with
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of them choosing to stay on the
island
, whereas the rest decided to rest on
cruise
ships
. Over the following 2 years, the total
number
 of
tourists
 kept increasing with the average growth per year around 0.5
million
 people. During 2010 and 2015, travellers preferred to stay on
island
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the island
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 rather than on
cruise
ships
. But
this
 trend changed in 2016 when the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who stay on
island
Correct article usage
the island
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 unexpectedly decreased.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
tourists
 who stay on
cruise
ships
 rose significantly
about
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to about
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 0.5
million
 until 2017. In the final year, the
Caribbean
island
 recorded a sharp rise to 3.5
million
 in the total
number
 of visitors or 250% growth from 2010.
Likewise
, the
number
 of
tourists
 who stayed on
cruise
ships
 experienced a sharp increase to precisely 2
million
, surpassing the figure for those staying on the
island
 (1.5
million
).
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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