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Some people fail in school but End up being successful in life why do you think that is the case? What is most important thing to succeed in life?

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Some
people
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 don't do well during their studies;
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, lead a happy and satisfying
life
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. I believe
success
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 can not be measured with grades,
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 hard
work
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 plays an integral part to achieve
success
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 in
life
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.
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 with , every individual student has
different
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 calibre.
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, they have their own tendency to absorb knowledge in different stages of
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.
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, some
people
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 who don't perform well in school become successful
people
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 in practical
life
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. The reason behind
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 is , they are not fond of reading or scared of exams; whereas in professional
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 they have the talent to handle situations in a more professional way.
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, it has been seen that students who get lesser grades in schools mostly end up being qualified professionals because they always live with regrets to achieve something better which makes them more competitive and their hard
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 pays off. In my belief
success
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 mainly depend on two main things.
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, it is the hard
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 a
person
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 does in their
life
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 that certainly makes them successful.
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, if a
person
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 needs to pass an exam and he works day and night so surely he will get succeeded.
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, luck is a major factor to become a successful
person
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. Some
people
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 are God gifted and just with little
effort
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 they can achieve their goals; whereas some
people
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 spend their whole
life
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 but are never been able to reach their goals. To conclude, I strongly believe that hard
work
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 and good luck can change the entire
life
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 of a
person
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 and help them
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successful
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succeed
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. On the other side, it is not necessary that an average student will never do better in their practical
life
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.
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 average students are more hardworking and achieve their goals faster, so never measure
success
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 with children academic performance
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