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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the use of
computers
 has been increased by
children
. Some people think that
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 of
computers
 has negative effects on
children
 life, but I think it
also
 has some positive impact.
To begin
 with, the negative impact of using the
computer
 is widely admitted. If
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young
children
 are addicted to
computer
games
 they will lose their interest in studying. They will waste their most of time
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playing high-tech
games
. The negative impact is not only limited to time waste. There are
also
 some psychological and physical problems that can be created.
For instance
, if a child is too habitual of 3D
games
 he will live in a virtual world. He will not be interested in physical
games
 ,
Also
 there are many applications or websites are circulating which include the media
that is
 not appropriate for
children
.
On the other hand
, the positive effects of using a
computer
 must be emphasized. As a high-tech tool
computers
 can provide
children
 with diversified methods to learn efficiently. There are many web pages and applications which are specially designed for teaching and inspiring to access the information.
Also
,
children
 are attracted easily by the interactions in educational
computer
 programs, so that they absorb knowledge effectively in a lively atmosphere, and it proves to be welcomed by both parents and teachers. In conclusion, though
computers
 are harmful up to some extent for
children
. But in my opinion, disadvantages are not weighed to advantages. In the end, the onus is on parents to oversee their
children
. It is acceptable that youngsters use
computers
 two or three times a week, but parents still need to be aware of the unhealthy information on the internet and video
games
 addiction of their offspring.
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  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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