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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom

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There have been huge improvements in technology in most aspects of people’s lives, significantly in the education sector. Nowadays a number of students are used to
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 on the computer to gain information for their assignments. Meanwhile, others leave their traditional way of studying and switch to online schooling. These changes are causing a major impact on the roles of teachers which may lead to a decrease in the importance of the lecturer. Some people strongly believe that accessing online material time-saving process to obtain information.
Moreover
, they think the availability of a vast range of information on websites increases the quality of their work. In order, dependency on the teacher decreases to gain knowledge, which is one of the reasons for less importance given to the instructor.
For example
, it is proven that different natures of students are available in the classroom, some are
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fast learners and others need more time to understand. So that they look for knowledge in computers rather than a lecturer.
Further
, they concentrate in the class very less believing that even though they slip the lesson, still they can refer to the computer.
However
, the interaction of educators is very important to develop the learner’s emotional intelligence. In order to express their feeling, present their ideas, respect other feelings and respond to them
accordingly
.
Also
, it will help the tutor to analyze the tutee’s strengths and weaknesses and guide him
accordingly
. In conclusion, still, the role of the tutor is more important to interact with students to develop their emotional intelligence. Because the machine cannot replace human interaction. Which is very important to develop social skills.
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